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Try-Out: Kaí Byakuran; Kaí Byakuran [APPROVED]

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Try-Out: Kaí Byakuran; Kaí Byakuran [APPROVED]

Post by Ravilin Asura on Wed May 16, 2012 6:21 pm

Try-out Role-Player: Kaí Byakuran
Try-out Character's Name: Kaí (Keikoku) Ichiro Byakuran
Try-out Character's Race: Shinigami


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Re: Try-Out: Kaí Byakuran; Kaí Byakuran [APPROVED]

Post by Guest on Wed May 16, 2012 8:01 pm


Normally a Shinigami had no reason to be in the Realm of the Living, but this was an exception. Of course any Shinigami could go to Karakura Town or any place in the world, that they wanted, if they had no work that day. That would have been nice, to come to Karakura, in a time where Kai-San could observe humans and their behavior even further. That sounds pretty odd, considering the fact that he was human at one point, but he has forgotten what it meant to be "human." Many things had changed since his time as a human, and people got even greedier and much more ignorant, when it came to conserving money. He would never understand this, regardless of how much time he spent reading up on it, or observing it. Naturally though, when entering the Realm of the Living, one must be in Gigai form.

Kai-San was not familiar with Gigai, directly, but he had heard of it and seen people use it. As for personal experience, he had none so this was a "first" for him. A little grey ball had been handed to him before he departed from Soul Society, which he held onto tightly, when he passed through the Dangai, trying to avoid the cleaner. The cleaner was a nasty beast, would devour anyone that wasn't supposed to be in the Precipice world, and it was incredibly fast at that. Powerful, and has speed? That was a deadly combination, which is exactly why he had to hold onto his Gigai "tablet" tightly as he ran through the Dankai, to a portal that would lead him to the Human World.

Once the stress of being chased was off his shoulders, he was much more relaxed; and he was ready to rest, before the big mission that he was about to participate in. A slow descent from the portal that hovered above Karakura was nice. It gave him time to catch his breath and chill out, but it also offered another thing - a chance to view the town. Keikoku hadn't really visited Karakura Town since he died, some time ago - and he was curious now to see what all had changed. More buildings, that is the only thing he noticed, that and more graveyards. Everything was similar though, but he did notice there was a huge mall now, which was non-existent a few years back. At any rate, his feet touched the asphalt and he began to observe his surroundings. Trees, fences, pretty houses and cars. Those were things he wasn't used to, but he had to adjust or he would be seen as a "loon." Immediately after reaching the ground though, he swallowed his Gigai tablet, hiding his real body with his spiritual energy.



As he roamed the streets, he noticed many things that had changed with the women, which was something he WOULD notice. Once a womanizer, always one, is how he thought. His thought process was different though, compared to males nowadays, and always. The idea of sex itself ran through his head constantly, usually blocking out all other thought processes. Most people look down on his sexual appetite, but what they don't know is that if he met the "right girl," he would change immediately. That really didn't matter though, he noticed girls were a lot prettier now, and taller, and seemed very nice and delicate. He had to continue roaming though, to see if he could find the man he was coming to Karakura Town to recruit, for his mission to Hueco Mundo. From what he had read about this exiled Shinigami, however, would mean he would be stuck in Karakura for days. This guy was illusive, so he would be hard to find - even with the ability to sense spiritual pressures, it would still be difficult.

Up ahead was something that Keikoku wanted to venture, a shopping mall. There were malls back in his time as a human, but they were small. This was like all the general stores he visited as a child, but at on a monumental scale - which was really interesting. The architecture was not brilliant by any means, like ancient cultures and their amazing builds, but it was still beautiful nonetheless. Doors that opened automatically, that was new, and was certainly years ahead of the technology from his life. This place was an exciting area of town, so he assumed, as there were plenty of "young" people there, hanging out. This had to be the cool place in town, even though it didn't matter to Kei-San, he was the coolest. In his own right he was "cool," because he was a Shinigami; and that is more than any human can say, at this point in their life. As he entered the mall, he could sense a spiritual pressure that was unfamiliar to him, and raised some of his suspicions. Why would a power of this magnitude be in a mall? Was it hostile, or was it merely a human escaping his situation with his powers, and trying to join "reality?" That didn't matter, he had to find out who this "mystery human" was. He began his walk over to the person, they were on the other side of the store, more than likely from what he could sense, the food court.


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Post by Ravilin Asura on Wed May 16, 2012 9:20 pm

A young woman with locks the shade of cinnamon was crouched in the mall, the blue eyes wide in surprise. Her reiatsu was tingling slightly, pushing outward as if trying to reach for something. Maxine didn't know how to control herself properly with her spiritual energy. The strong surge was more than enough to make a few people wonder what the hell was going on. The wash of the energy was affecting all the people around her. There were soft whimpers and groans, some people wee out right bawling. The effect of her power was to manipulate the emotions of other people. Considering the tight feeling of fear biting at her stomach it was understandable the people were bawling and shaking as if their nightmare was haunting them. The mass of emotions were mixed. Maxine stood stock still looking pale, oh god, she was going to vomit! Closing her eyes tightly the brown haired beauty shuddered in fear the queasy feeling rolling through her unwanted.

"S-someone please! Help me!" Maxine whimpered, feeling a hollow approaching. The hollow had been stalking her for hours which was why she thought hiding out in the mall would be safe. Why was she so stupid? Her eyes opened widely to stare blankly to the room around her. Anyone who knew anything would know Maxine was blind. The beautiful eyes couldn't focus on anything. Rocking back and forth the soft whimpers continued, er clothing tattered with dirt and blood on it. "Help...please."
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Post by Guest on Wed May 16, 2012 9:54 pm

Keikoku couldn't help but notice some whimpering in a corner, and it was the exact location of the reiatsu he had sensed. Running a hand through his long, flowing, black hair - he scouted the area around her. There was a hollow off in the distance, but it wasn't exactly your everyday grade hollow. This girl was in danger and so where several other people if he didn't step in. An adjuchas was never meant to be taken lightly, and it was one step closer to the rank of Vasto Lorde, the very grade of hollow that had eradicated Kei's family all those years ago. In an instant he shot himself out of his gigai, and watched as the body disappeared, thanks to the technology he had invented whilst being the head of the Research and Development department, all those years ago. As his Captain's haori blew in the wind that his spiritual pressure created, he smiled - he hadn't had a thrill in so long, and he was way overdue. Allowing his violent, smoke grey reiatsu to consume him - he began to hold up his hands to use a particular kido that he favored.

His hair began to blow violently, whipping around his form, slapping him in the face; the pressure behind each blow was strong enough to slice skin, literally, of a human. Shaking loose all nerves of using this kido without approval from anyone, he began to use his hand motions and began uttering the incantation for his attack. "Limit of the thousands hands, respectful hands, unable to touch the darkness. Shooting hands unable to reflect the blue sky. The road that basks in light, the wind that ignited the embers, time that gathers when both are together, there is no need to be hesitant, obey my orders. Light bullets, eight bodies, nine items, book of heaven, diseased treasure, great wheel, grey fortress tower. Aim far away, scatter brightly and cleanly when fired - Hadō #91. Senjū Kōten Taihō" As soon as he uttered the incantation about ten pink energy bodies that were much like arrows, appeared around him - like a belt of comets. The adjuchas was still far enough away from the girl that when the attack hit, she would remain unharmed by the explosion - which was what Keikoku had hoped for all along.

As the focal point was matched up, the hollows chest, he smiled. Each beam began to hit him and then a large explosion followed, leaving a smokey crater behind - and hollow residue. The most satisfying bit of being a Shinigami, in his opinion, was to be able to eradicate hollows, the filth of the world. His reiatsu now calming down, and taking a composed form as it whipped about him - he approached the young, beautiful girl. Dropping to his knees, he reached a hand out to her and gave her a gentle smile - trying to show her that everything was okay now. "You are okay now, I am Keikoku Byakuran. Who are you?" He said, trying to calm the girl down from her near encounter with one of the most powerful forms of a hollow. His soul leaned towards the lighter side for a change, as he felt he had actually done a great justice - instead of just doing a simple thing, like filling out papers. If there was anything further he could do, he would help this girl get home - and then probably wipe her memory of what happened - and then come back and fix the floor, that way no one was suspicious that day; suspicious of anything supernatural, that way they would remain hidden, and he wouldn't have the Captain Commander on his ass.
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Re: Try-Out: Kaí Byakuran; Kaí Byakuran [APPROVED]

Post by Ravilin Asura on Wed May 16, 2012 10:36 pm

Try-out Profile Evaluation Section - Sub-Total: 30/36
  • General -Total: 11/12
  • Thoroughness - 4/4
  • Organization - 3/4
  • Cleanliness - 4/4

  • Character - Total: 10/12
  • Originality and creativity - 4/6
  • Character depth - 6/6

  • Zanpakuto - Total: 9/12
  • Originality and creativity - 4/6
  • Zanpakuto depth - 5/6


Try-out Post Evaluation Section - Sub-Total: 49/64
  • Creativity - Total: 14/18
  • Setting - 5/6
  • Action scene - 5/6
  • Character reaction -4/6

  • Grammar and Sentence Structure - Total: 11/16
  • Punctuation - 3/4
  • Sentence structure - 4/4
  • Readability - 4/8

  • Storytelling Ability - Total: 3/4

  • Flow and Overall Structure - Total: 5/8
  • Post flow - 2/4
  • Post organization - 3/4

  • General Detail - Total: 16/18
  • Setting detail - 5/6
  • Character action detail - 5/6
  • Character interaction detail and integrity - 6/6


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