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Post by Ravilin Asura Tue Jun 05, 2012 2:52 pm

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Post by Koysilo Tue Jun 05, 2012 11:30 pm

The large artificial sun was hanging lazily in the clear Huceo Mundo skies, bathing the golden sands in white light, as there was no shadows par one of what appeared to be a small man. Night fall was approaching and no sign of life could be seen across the vast sands, most of the hollows by this time went in hiding anyway, as the more dangerous and powerful ones came out to play during the crisp, damp air that was nightfall. As the afternoon drew near to an end, not a soul was in sight besides this one man who looked lost as he trotted his way through white sands.

Plotting along through the sands was one, Koysilo Mitsunari, his long white hair flowing behind him, swaying from side to side with each step. He had been travelling a long time, as Koysilo received word that he was invited to enter Las Noches for a rather special announcement from a highly ranking Espada, and yet he found himself still wandering the endless blood stained deserts day-in and day-out. He wasn’t sure how long it had been since he left the forest and started travelling along the deserts, it had been far too long anyway, however since this was such a special occasion, Koysilo was honour bound to attend and if he didn’t he could only assume the consequences of not attending would be serve. Yet upon his receiving the invite, Koy wondered why he was chosen. It wasn’t like the invitation said anything about becoming an Espada or even a fraccion, no, the hollow that delivered it just said that he would need to travel to the fortress and all his answers would become clear upon his arrival. Yet this was the chance he needed to make his way into Las Noches, in order to see how powerful the Espada really were; sure, he heard that they were strong but Koysilo has never witnessed one so according to him their powers were only fables, fabricated to keep the balance of power.

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It had been another two days of travel and Koysilo still wouldn’t give up. Anyone else would have possibly given up, stopped and headed home however after travelling so far, Koysilo continued trucking on. He could feel his legs weak from the constant travel however he wasn’t going to complain about it. Nearly there, nearly there. That is all that ran through Koy’s mind and it seemed that his beliefs in mind over matter where true, as he made his way over a large sand dune he saw the home of the Espada, Las Noches. Koysilo started to pick up his pace, his walking turned into running as with each passing second he approached closer and closer towards the white fortress. The design of the building was amazing and Koy wondered how the building came to be.

The gates open as he was greeted by a fellow arrancar, she was petite and had coral blue locks of hair that were roughly the same length as Koysilos. She bowed and Koy replied with his own, a sign of mutual respect was present between the two, and Koysilo thought it was a rather refreshing since living out in the forests didn’t have the perks and benefits of having civilized hollows. She offered a hand spoke, “Welcome to Las Noches, Koysilo-san. If you would follow me, I shall take you to Denkibou-donno who is awaiting us in the main hall.”

He nodded and the girl lead the way. So it was a man named Denkibou that sent for me? As they entered the main building, Koy had plenty of questions to ask however he didn’t want to seem rude, so he didn’t say a word. The two walked through the hallways silently and the only voices you could hear were their feet taping along the ground with each step that was taken. Arrancar lined the hall as they all looked up at the passing couple. The girl who had yet to tell Koysilo her name opened the doors the large hall. In the centre of the hall was a large marble table, ten seats lined the length of the table and at the end was a single man sitting down. His hair was short and dark yet his eyes were light, This must be Denkibou. The man chuckled hysterically, “So you must be Koysilo. Welcome to Las Noches, I am the Tercera Espada…Denkibou.”

Koysilo was interested in what he had to say, the girl ushered him into a seat and so he sat. She went to the right said of the Tercera and stood next to him, must be his fraccion or so he thought. Denkibou smiled as he ran a hand down the girls arm and thanked her for escorting Koysilo. He referred to her as Hime. “So what would you like of me, Denkibou-san?” Koy’s voice filled the air with grace and elegance as his voice was soft yet quite powerful.

“Straight to the point I see. Also, please, Denkibou will do.”

“Alright…Denkibou.”

“I would like you to become an Espada. I have watched your growth since you entered Huceo Mundo, I’m pleased with your progress.”

“Thank you, Denkibou, I strive to become the most powerf—“ Koysilo was cut off from talking as the large door to the left of them opened. A ground of Arrancar came through, Denkibou stood up as what seemed to be another Espada made their presence known. Not knowing what to do, Koy also stood in an attempt to show respect, after all he didn’t want to make a bad impression as this man was going to help him become an Espada. The crowed of arrancar went passed the table and Koysilo could feel their strong aura. It wasn’t terrifying however it was quite intimidating yet no fear crossed Koy’s face as he smirked and waited.

Denkibou spoke, yet it was directed towards the other Arrancar and the Espada. “Thank you for interrupting our meeting…Assholes.”
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Post by Ravilin Asura Wed Jun 06, 2012 12:05 am

A pink haired girl emerged from the group, the wide blue eyes staring over to Denkibou, her body trembled slightly before she swallowed slightly. Ravilin looked between the arrancar as the guard at her side smiled widely amused by being called an asshole. "Please excuse this intrusion Denkibou-san. I'm here to request the presence of Koysilo - Nisha-sama wants to see him." Ravilin bowed her head, the silence in the hall thicker before the arrancar about her looked a bit miffed with what they were to do now. She bowed her head in apology quickly to the espada before motioning for the silver haired man to come to her side. Ravilin was dressed in the white uniform her blue eyes filled with fear.

Nisha had promised punishment if she didn't complete such a simple task. If the man refused to go with her then she'd have to use force to get him to go. Now Ravilin wasn't violent in the least which was why Nisha pushed her around with ease. The girl shot a glance to the other arrancar before looking to the blue haired fraccion who offered a scowl in return. Ravilin heard someone mumble that she was the rulers pet bitch that was kept on a tight leash. The baby blues widened in surprise. Why were people talking about her in such a manner? Scrunching her nose slightly the young arrancar stepped back the pink locks swaying about the lithe form. She could sense the flickering of power washing over them as Denkibou shot a dark glowering glare in her direction as if to say back off.

"I asked to meet him first." Came the growl of the reply from Denkibou.

Ravilin looked panicked, did he really want to push Nisha's patience? The woman wasn't stable at most times. Slinking back her fingers slunk into the depths of her hair, tugging on the strands nervously. "Please come, Koysilo-sama. We mean no harm." Ravilin murmured looking away from the angry espada. Then she turned on her heels heading to the door knowing she had to return to the current leader of Las Noches either empty handed or with the arrancar.

"It's thanks to me she's even in power." Denkibou shot at the departing figure of Ravilin. The arrancar in the crowd waited to either force the man or escort him. The pink haired girl was lingering in the hallway to figure out what his choice was.
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Post by Koysilo Wed Jun 06, 2012 1:48 am

"Please excuse this intrusion Denkibou-san. I'm here to request the presence of Koysilo - Nisha-sama wants to see him." The girls voice was soft and one could tell she didn’t feel comftable in her current surrondings. She motioned him to follow and for some reason Koysilo thought it might have been a good idea to see this Nisha simply because Denkibou was getting quite worked up over the fact that she wanted to see him. He smiled at the girl, trying to show that he meant no harm to her so she could relax. Yet it didn’t seem to work.

Koysilo didn’t know what to do, he could go with the girl or stay here with Denkibou. Either choice would make an enemy for life and so Koy needed time to evaluate his options before he committed to either one of them. Denkibou offered him the power to become an Espada while this Nisha didn’t offer anything, Denkibou was also said he was the one who rose her to power. Was this true? Koysilo stood up again and ran his hands down his pure white hair, his voiced fill with rawer power as he spoke. “Denkibou I thank you for the meeting however before I commit, I would like to visit this Nisha-sama.”

"Please come, Koysilo-sama. We mean no harm." The pink haired girl murmured again.

Denkibou growled as he hit the marble table. The ground shook and he went into a temporary fit of rage. He threw a chair to the side and Koysilo had finally made up his mind, Denkibou’s emotions were weak and thus he was not fit to offer power to him. Koysilo thought that this lady called Nisha might be able to help him out and so Koysilo walked over to the pink haired girl and was about to leave when Denkibou spoke again, his voice filled with anger and what seemed despair from the rejection of Koysilo. “You dare to leave? Even after I tossed you a bone, you filthy mut. I’m going to kill you one day, do you understand me? Hime, finish him!”

Denkibou believed Koysilo to be weaker than him and thus he wouldn’t fight him, instead he tossed his underling at him. The fraccion to Denkibou; Hime was quite a beautiful one yet she was also quite fierce. She charged forth with only hands, Koysilo didn’t want to hurt her however as she drew closer his fighting instinct took in. He drew his blade from the black sheath as the metallic grey blade reflected the light within the room. Hime lunged with her right fist forward, her muscles up close were constantly bulging and retracting and you could literally see the veins in the muscles bludge out. With quick flick of his wrist Koysilo directed the blade against the hand that lunged and guided its path so it would miss. Hime was not impressed; growling and swinging with her other arm and yet Koysilo managed to dodge it with a side step and push her aside. He then stopped and shouted at Denkibou.


“You invite me here, yet you attack me. Go on and prepare for in the future we shall battle when I am…Espada.” Koysilo walked with the pink haired girl who still hadn’t identified herself. Their walk was brief and by the time Koy could ask how long they had to walk, they were already there. Two large wooden doors now stood in the way between possibly the most power person within Las Noches (or so he could sense at the time) and himself. Koysilo took a deep breath as he steadied himself for whatever was about to come. Koysilo however didn’t forget his manners and bowed to the girl before speaking to her.

“Thank you for leading me this way. May I ask your name?” His voice was caring and soft and this time it wasn’t intimidating at all. He opened the doors and took a step into the room, Nisha was sitting in a throne before him and before she could speak, Koysilo spoke.

“Denkibou promised me power, prestige and so what can you give me? Because I don’t want to call that twat my partner or friend.”
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  • Thoroughness - 3/4
  • Organization - 4/4
  • Cleanliness - 4/4

  • Character - Total: 10/12
  • Originality and creativity - 5/6
  • Character depth - 5/6

  • Zanpakuto - Total: 5/12
  • Originality and creativity - 4/6
  • Zanpakuto depth - 3/6


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  • Creativity - Total: 14/18
  • Setting - 4/6
  • Action scene - 5/6
  • Character reaction -5/6

  • Grammar and Sentence Structure - Total: 13/16
  • Punctuation - 4/4
  • Sentence structure - 3/4
  • Readability - 6/8

  • Storytelling Ability - Total: 4/4

  • Flow and Overall Structure - Total: 6/8
  • Post flow - 3/4
  • Post organization - 3/4

  • General Detail - Total: 14/18
  • Setting detail - 4/6
  • Character action detail - 5/6
  • Character interaction detail and integrity - 5/6


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